The view loses charm
15 December 2015
Staring at its grace
Willow tree stooping over
All magic peeks shuns
Review my beauty
With attention’s past glamour
Look ignores appeal
When eye sees beauty
With too self-centred intent
The view loses charm
I Feel Pretty – Julie Andrews
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The first painting of the willow tree washed in purple is enchanting but the other willow tree makes me see snakes infused in its make-up. The poem fits the descend from charming beauty into questionable intentions. Adding Julie Andrews singing ‘I Feel Pretty’ is a nice touch. One of my most favorite people on the planet. A great closer. A most enchanting and charming presentation. An enticing look worth the visit and time. – jk 🙂
Thank you, your comments are very thoughtful and indicate a lot of depth in your analysis. Most appreciated insights. I love Julie Andrews too 🙂
I try to appreciate what I find in another’s work. If as much effort is put in as you have done, I want more than ever to get the words out which will describe my response. I feel your have created a gift for the viewer. So thank you, esp. for adding Julie to your art. 🙂
Great haiku building up to a climax in the third, a wonderful message for politicians
Thank you Denis. I meant it for a range of people who keep persisting on reminiscing past glory at whatever level it may be located; politicians sounds like a very apt and special inclusion 😀
Review my beauty
With attention’s past glamour
Don’t most of us view ourselves and judge ourselves, with the intentions of the past? I know I do, constantly.
Love this, Geetha. <3
Thank you Eric. I think that the past should only serve for us as lessons for what to do and what not to do in the now and in the future. As regards judging ourselves, we should rather assess in what ways and in which capacity we could strive for becoming more truthful versions of ourselves. I think the whole point is about being truthful to oneself rather than judging oneself and trying to be a “better” person. In terms of viewing ourselves, yes, we can somehow get stuck in past versions of ourselves and not just on the level of physical appearance.
one has to wonder if the subject is looking into a mirror or aged reflection…’view my beaut…’reads like the speaker wants to be viewed as he/she would have been in the past…I know people like this, who, at seventy wear clothing and make themselves up to try and pass for thirty…there is nothing wrong with wanting to remain youthful but it can become obsessive to the point of looking downright silly to those observing it…great write, Geetha!
Ah ah ah, Thomas. I’d say yours is the subtlest reading as almost always. Very fine perception my friend. I had integrated that notion too but was not sure it would come across in review past glamour. Thank you for getting it because I had thought a while on how to get this across and keep the requirements as this was directed writing 🙂
You write so well, my friend and I am happy I could capture some of the depth which you write 😀
Thanks again Thomas. I never blush or this would have made me do so 😉
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Must not be afraid to express love for beauty! In all its forms.. Beauty is not and never will be just what you see.. Being Aesthetic and being able to say what pleases is innocence however a lot depends on the way the receiver perceives it.. And that is the problem
That is also true Paul. Thank you for your thoughts my friend 🙂
Nicely said. Thank you! Special love for the first haiku and picture! The curves of the wood, the face.
Thank you. Yes, the williw is beautiful. I chanced upon it not knowing purple willows existed
This is so true.
I know 🙂
with too self centered intent the view loses its charm- I love this last two lines…so true
Thank you, just a thought as I am a keen watcher of people and human nature in general. This one tends to appear a lot 🙂
Your right…
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